"Forgive me Father, for I have sinned" a deep, gruff voice spoke. From what John heard, him and the man on the other side were alone in the church, the house of god was filled with the voice of a gruff, burdened man. "I've committed awful actions, and I wish to repent before I do it again..." John felt he knew where this was going. A drinking party? Unmarried intercourse? He knew, but listened. "Speak child, what have you done that torments you so?"

Finally a serious story in the phansite.

He commited the sin of submitting to the will of gods

"Have you heard the latest reports, Father? The kids...." at this, John paused and recollected. This morning....yes, on the news. Children and sometimes entire families....gone. Sometimes bodies are found crucified or blood on the walls reading messages. Or notes describing the victim through the killers eyes. No handwriting matched the notes, and no fingerprints were ever found. "Yes, I've heard of the incidents my son."

"I did the deeds father, to indulge myself" The gruff man spoke, as if it was so easy to speak of such things. Johnathan held in his surprise, a murderer had just confessed to him! What did he have to gain from this? If he had nothing to gain, then what to lose? Perhaps this killer said so knowing how men of the cloth never carried phones or even....knew John? Knew him and his family? "It started a month ago" the gruff man cut into johns thoughts "a young girl, Lindsay was her name. A pretty young thing with fair skin. Talented she was....but too trusting. I took her away in broad daylight....." John thought to himself....Lindsay Terson was the first girl to go missing.....

And I'm stopping there. I feel slightly satisfied but I need to figure stuff out for this. I want to do this type of story but I'm not quite....there yet on the specifics

That was...dark.









9/10

Thanks?

I Should continue.....but it'll probably be deleted because it'll get super dark

Go for it, Boss. It's nice to have something not romantic (or maybe even lewd) for a change.

Just uhh...don't get too edgy with it.

Not trying to be edgy, just creepy and dark. Trying to evoke a feeling of "oh shit, this isn't good" not "oh shit, this is needlessly dark" the intro isn't great but I feel I did somewhat eh with it. I'll continue writing for a bit then

"You....took her? Where might she be, child?" The gruff voice chuckled darkly, and spoke again "what does it matter? She's gone now..." John held back his feelings, his tears. He knew what happened to her, but couldn't do anything. "Then there was James....the boy was a mischief maker, giving his parents a hard time. I got him by coercing him with cash." John was horrified, James had been just a bit after Lindsay....why was this man saying this? Why was he confessing? John worked up courage, and spoke "my child, why are you confessing such things? Does it not worry you?" Another chuckle, and a snarky comment "Because, Pastor John. You won't tell anybody, and I know that. Because you know how easy i can get your family. You'd be suprised how easy it is to observe a family from afar."

Now try to imagine this story narrated by Sojiro's voice...
God, that was intense!

This is pretty dark, but I like a serious story on the phansite.
Looking forward dor the next

For*

I love this. So. So. Much.

@Hillock I misread "Sojiro" as "Shinjiro". Now, I can only read this in Shinji's voice

I don't really know where to go from here. So I just want to know honest opinions, and whether or not I should continue with this type of thing

It won't be deleted.